Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

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Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Yaguri Issui on Sun Jan 17, 2010 8:43 am

Basic Information

Name: Yaguri Issui

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Rank: Espada

Number: 3

Looks:
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Hollow Hole: Yaguri's Hollow Hole is located on his chest where the heart is located. However, due to the style of the clothing, it is hidden beneath the fabric.

Mask Fragment: Yaguri's mask rests upon his head. With a large horn that almost looks to be an ear, his animal is represented through this.

Number Tattoo: Yaguri's Number is located on his wrist.

Personality: Yaguri acts much as his appearance dictates. Against all forms of fighting, he will often try to find a path that sheds the least amount of blood. However, if he is forced to fight, defeat will be a swift outcome to any that underestimate him. In battle, Yaguri has been known to remain his quiet and saddened self but portrays fierce attacks that would make any fear him. Another notable quality of his is his memory. Yaguri possesses a unique trait to retain every detail that he sees. Known as Photographic memory, it is a useful tool in letting his superiors know about specific events that took place while on a mission. Yaguri's death aspect is known as "Pain". With that in mind, some may find another trait of his as an oxymoron. Born from the "Pain" within the many souls of the Gillian, Yaguri himself is unable to feel anything at all. His body does not possess pain receptors, nerves or even the ability to create or feel emotion; it does not exist. Due to this, he often seems cold and heartless, thus the placement of his hollow hole.

Techniques:
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Name: Garganta
State: Both
Description: This is how arrancar move to and from Hueco Mundo. Kaname Tosen and Kisuke Urahara have also demonstrated the ability to use the technique. It literally tears open the dimensional fabric separating the worlds, revealing a tunnel of whirling, torrential energy that must be focused and solidified to create a discernible pathway.

Name: Hierro
State: Both
Description: This refers to the hardened skin of the Arrancar, which is a result of their compressed spiritual power. While their skin is strong enough to block even released Zanpakuto bare-handed, it is by no means impenetrable. Stronger Arrancar have proportionally stronger skin.

Name: Pesquisa
State: Both
Description: This is the arrancar equivalent of the Shinigami ability to sense Spiritual Pressure. It functions similar to a sonar. Using pesquisa requires most Espada to enter a meditative state or use some others have a trigger unique to the user.

Name: Regeneration
State: Both
Description: A most notable trait is that fact that he has extremely high speed regeneration. Yaguri can quickly regenerate any part of his body except for his brain and internal organs. However, this power also requires that he had sufficient spiritual energy.

Name: Sonido
State: Both
Description: A very quick movement performed by Arranacar that allows them to move at high speeds for brief periods of time.

Name: Cero
State: Both
Description: A high-powered energy blast that can be fired from various body parts, such as mouth, tongue, hand or fingers. For Yaguri, his Cero fires from his finger tips as a large white beam.

Name: Gran Rey Cero
State: Both
Description: It is performed by mixing an Arrancar's own blood with the Cero. The result is a cero with a much greater attack power, size, speed, and force, as well as a change of color unique to the Espada. It is also several times more powerful than a normal Cero.

Name: Cero Oblivion
State: Both
Description: Cero Oblivion is a purple Cero, used only by the top three members of the Arrancar Five in their released form. This cero far greater then Cero Oscurus in power. It covers any exposed light into pitch darkness. The Cero Oblivion's range is vast, and its attack power is great. The Cero Oblivion is far greater than a average Cero. It is stated that Cero Oblivion's blast range is much larger than Cero Oscuras, meaning it is able to damage more enemies. [Credit goes to Aki. As stated, the top three Espada are able to use this form of Cero]

Name: Nueve Colas Cero - (Nine Tailed Cero)
State: Both
Description: This form of Cero is Yaguri's own special creation. Instead of firing off a single Cero, Yaguri will split it's power into nine smaller beams that will twist and turn like living things. While dividing up the damage for each one, it increases the difficulty in which the enemy has to avoid.

Name: Hoshi no Tama - (Star Ball)
State: Both
Description: This technique is an automatic ability that activates the moment an illusionary technique has been used by anyone other than Yaguri. The pupil of his eye will become thin and cat-like as the effects take place. Yaguri is able to copy and counter any illusionary abilities or techniques that he sees. Even if the technique is not used on himself, Yaguri is able to see what is not really there and stop it. This takes the same amount of spiritual energy to counter the illusion as is needed to recreate it.

Name: Kogitsune-Maru - (Little Fox)
State: Both
Description: By looking at an individual, Yaguri is able to cast a tangible illusion that is even capable of dealing real damage to the effected. The illusion produces a single copy of Yaguri. Only the single person who is under the illusion is able to see the "clone" and capable of dealing and receiving damage. The "clone" will automatically disperse at the end of the target's next turn.

Name: Kitsune-Bi - (Fox Fire)
State: Both
Description: With this technique, Yaguri is capable of placing an illusion upon a target(s) that will create inextinguishable black flames. The flames of this illusion are visible only by those who are affected as if they were real. This includes smell, sound and tangibility. Any damage done by this illusion is not real and incapable of killing. Those killed by this illusion have only fainted due to the mental trauma. While the flames are inextinguishable by water, simply getting out of Yaguri's line of sight will cause the flames to disperse. This can be done by getting to a "blind spot" or even hiding behind a rock.

Name: Kitsunetsuki - (Spirit Possession)
State: Both
Description: This technique is Yaguri's strongest ability. Yaguri is able to create multiple invisible spiritual threads that he can manipulate to bind a person to the ground. They can also be used for attacks or as a defensive method against any attack. The threads are indestructible and cannot be broken. While powerful, these threads can only be manifested through a reflection of reflective surfaces such as a building's windows or clear water, where they can be seen. If the image is distorted, the threads will disperse.

Weapon Information

Weapon Name: Inari

Weapon Looks: Looking much like a normal Katana, the hilt is composed of two Japanese Torii Gates. It is highly believed that Torii mark the transition from the sacred (the shrine) to the profane (the normal world). The sword's hilt is wrapped with a light blue cloth and hangs from the top of the hilt in a loose bow. The blade itself is sharp enough to slice through steel(not including strong weapons) and it's surface is smooth enough to reflect images like a mirror.

Weapon Description: Inari is capable of creating illusions that can be both casted on the target(s) or reality.

Resurrecion Release Phrase: "Sleep…"

Resurrecion Information

Name: Zenko - (Good Fox)

Represent: Kitsune - (White Fox)

Family: Illusions

Looks: Zenko unleashes with a burst of spiritual energy that falls around Yaguri as rain. Once in his Resurrecion form, the other half of his mask will form and will extend all the way down his back like a spine. The "spine" is also now connected to what looks to be a belt around his waist and continues down to a long and sharp tail that can be used for both offense and defense. His nails will also sharpen along with a few of his teeth.

Techniques:
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Name: Kogitsune-Maru - (Little Fox)
State: Both
Description: By looking at an individual, Yaguri is able to cast a tangible illusion that is even capable of dealing real damage to the effected. The illusion produces nine copies of Yaguri, that when killed, fade away. Only those who are under the illusion are able to see the "clones" and capable of dealing and receiving damage. The "clones" will automatically disperse at the end of the target's next turn.

Name: Kitsune-Bi - (Fox Fire)
State: Both
Description: With this technique, Yaguri is capable of placing an illusion upon a target(s) that will create inextinguishable black flames. The flames of this illusion are visible only by those who are effected and are now real. This includes smell, sound and tangibility. Any damage done by this illusion is now real and capable of killing. While the flames are inextinguishable by water, simply getting out of Yaguri's line of sight will cause the flames to disperse. This can be done by getting to a "blind spot" or even hiding behind a rock.

Stats

Strength: 40
Resurrecion 45
Segunda 51

Speed: 39
Resurrecion 44
Segunda 52

Dexterity: 38
Resurrecion 43
Segunda 51

Stamina 38
Resurrecion 43
Segunda 51

History and RP Sample

History: (your characters history, describe your life as a human, as a hollow, and your reincarnation into an arrancer/espada, please see the below for a brief guide on the evolution of a hollow-

Human > Hollow:

Born in a poor and dangerous village, famine was everywhere, along with the growing sickness of the people. Life itself was a curse for most of those that could withstand it, turning them strong and skillful. Yaguri had grown up cast aside from the lot of his people. With his family lost in dept., life was especially hard for him. When the sickness struck, those who had no money could not afford to go to the doctor and died shortly after being infected. Yaguri watched his younger sister die before him but soon fell ill to the same fate. Living life as a soul, it was not long before he grew different and hollow inside. With sorrow and anguish as his last feelings, he transformed into a hollow.

Hollow > Gillian: Even as a hollow, the sadness followed him where ever he went. As he preyed upon the soul of his sister, Yaguri weeped. What had he done? He had eaten the soul of his only family member and would live to feel a pain worse than death. Unable to control his thirst for their kind, the sky seemed to cry along side him. Deciding to save as many as he could, Yaguri began consuming other hollows. It was strange thing... eating those exactly like you. What exactly had he become? As he wailed in agony and remorse, it would always rain. He soon came to be known as the Weeping Hollow, for is would rain only in his presence.

As he ate other hollow, the consumed souls compound in his body, until they become a giant mess of spirits that slowly grew into a Menos Grande (Gillian). With regret and grief as his driving force, Yaguri soon took control and began to kill as many other Gillian as he could. Feeling as if this was his only way to pay for his sins, his power increased with every meal.

Gillian > Adjuchas: A Gillian who continues to eat will become an Adjucha, compacting itself in size and gaining an animal-like form that will later become its Release form. Adjucha resemble armored white animals and they continue to eat other menos, hollow, and adjucha, for if they do not eat they will revert to their Gillian form and lose control of the Gillian forever more, giving other spirits a chance to control.

Adjuchas > Vasto Lorde/Arrancar: In a remote part of the White Desert, it always seemed to rain. It was a small mountain that was constantly covered in a mist and the only life that seemed to reside there were those that entered. However, screeches and screams could be heard as their souls were eaten. The "Weeping Hollow" lived deep in this location and fed off of those that entered. As he fed, he slowly formed a humanoid body but retained a mask and hole. At this point, Yaguri was known as a Vasto Lorde. A mysterious man soon came to this place and offered Yaguri a way to pay for his sins. Gloomily agreeing to the mans request, Yaguri followed the Obscura Oracion member. Having his mask torn off he became an Arrancar. Having enough souls to fill an ocean, a Zanpakutou formed from their sorrow.

Arrancar > Espada: Now an Arrancar, the next thing to do was become an Espada. Yaguri challenged the 3rd Espada the next day in order to prove his strength. As the room filled up with a thick mist, nothing could be seen. However, the mist slowly dissipated a moment later to show Yaguri in the exact location that he had started. His enemy had been sliced into many pieces and blood soaked the floor. To add to the mystery, Yaguri's sword was clean and bare no traces of blood. He was now the 3rd Espada.

RP Sample:
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Kai had a dream, a vivid one at that. Standing in a pitch black room, there was only himself and one other creature. From the center of the room, was a massive white fist that was clenched and stuck out form the ground. As he approached, it opened to reveal a white man with angel white wings and without a face. A mouth lay where his chest was and each finger had a red eye that peered out at him. The creature was beautiful and horrid all at the same time. The creature reached a hand out towards him as if trying to grab him. As it did, the ground beneath Kai seemed to be no more as he sank into it like water.

"Find me...". Kai awoke to the noise of a busy and rustling street. Sitting up and looking around, Kai had no idea what had just happened, and his head felt as though it was being split into two by a nail. Whatever the beast was, it was obviously not just a thing of his mind. it had been so very real; more real than reality. He would find this beast and find out what it wanted. Getting off his feet and rubbing the back of his head with his other hand, Kai parted the curtain that had seperated him and the little shack from the street. It was sunny, very sunny, making Kai squint.

Looking around, Kai was already confused, and being completly helpless, he asked around for help. From what he could gather from the people, Kai was in the Rukongai. He still had no idea what exactly that was, but he continued his little escapade of looking. After a few hours of roaming the streets, and still asking random questions to every soul that walked by, Kai came upon a group of people, clothed in brown and white robes, near a fairly large building that looked more kept up than the rest of the other houses. They were equiped with swords, and daggers. Curious, and almost stupid for approaching armed men, Kai greeted them. They all drew their swords and began to yell and scream at Kai , Why he was boasting spiritual pressure and making such hasty advances at him. Kai just backed away slowly not understanding a thing they were talking about. Out came a man from the building, in his late 40's maybe early 50's. He held two katanas, "Listen.. You fight me and you'll walk away alive, other wise I'll have these men strike you down where you stand, Shinigami."

Obviously, Kai is no such thing...yet. Kai literally had no choice but to accept and took one of the swords from the man. Kai had no training in the art of swordsmanship, Kai knew he was going to get hurt, badly. Trying to get into the stance the other man had, one of the other men yelled out. Immediately the Older man began to swing wildly at Kai. Leon did everything he could to block swing after swing, but the other man was slowly cutting him down. It started with just nicks, then moved to cuts, and soon deep lacerations were beginning to take place all over Kai. For his life, Kai mustered up the rest of his remaining strength and put it into one swing.

Blocking sucessfully, Kai pushed the mans sword away, jumped into the air and swung down as hard as he could. The man was surely dead. Suddenly he vanished and moved a few meters away from Kai. Kai couldnt' believe his eyes. He vanished and then reappeared unscaved. "Enough.. You did well." The older man sheathed his sword and turned around and looked back. "If you want... You can join us, I see great potential in you boy." Kai just stood there, blinking, speachless, and confused. Sword still on the ground from where he had missed, he restored his self back up to stand the best he could, though all the damage he had taken.

The other men just watched the older man return to the building with their mouths wide open. They looked at Kai, and knew what needed to be done. Two of them came over and took the sword away from him, and lifted Kai up onto thier shoulders and carried him aside. Kai was fading now, it was almost like the day at his house, but not as severe. In and out he went for what seemed days. Kai woke up in the middle of the night, sweating, seeing that all his wounds were gone. The room he was in was small, for once person only, a single bed and a night stand, door by the foot of the bed. Sitting up quickly, Kai became very light headed, in an instant he tried to get out of the room and lost his balance. Knocking himself back out on the nightstand. Waking up to the sound of drums being beat didn't help.

Kai pushed himself off the floor and walked out into the hallway, where a whole bunch of others were scrambling off somewhere. Lazily, and limping, kai followed the others to their destination. He still ached from the fight that had insued yesterday, but the wounds were literally gone. Passing through an open arch way, Kai found himself in a sizeable court where 30 or more people stood at attention waiting. Stading off in the front and to the right, facing all the others, at attetion also was the man Kai had fought the day before. A door to the left, adjacent to where Kai was standing out came an elderly man, probably in his 80's.

He spoke some words, mostly mumbling and it was out of earshot for Kai. Leaning against the doorway, Kai stared out at the crowd, all perfectly aligned and militarized. The old man stopped speaking turned around and head back the way he came, and the second the door slide closed behind him, all the members started to break off into groups of two and sparred. The older man from the day before came from out of sight and jokingly pushed Leon. Falling on his butt, Kai looked up at the man in confusion. "Alright kid, from this day on, you're part of this household. Here we train, later we eat, then train somemore, then sleep. Every morning before we begin, we hear the wisest of words from Elder Kazumo. Now get up and get training." Short and too the point. Kai struggled to get up and did as he was told, not like he even had a choice. From here on Kai trained and got stronger, much stronger, much quicker, much smarter, and learned to use a sword like a true man from this era. Kai learned about exactly where he was, and what was going on in his new world. After a few years, Kai worked hard and rose through the ranks of his family.

One day while down stairs in the basement beneathe the courtyard, Kai was training and messing around with the kids. They trained down there because the men upstairs needed more room to practice. Kai took his job seriously, but they were just kids after all. Goofing around and showing off to make the children smile and laugh, Kai glanced over to see one of the other members walk half-way down the stairs and yell at him. "Hey, Kai! The Elders want to speak with you, bro!" Kai nodded and waved to the kids and made his way up back top. Once up above, Kai walked past all the other men sparring, all in near perfect unison, all striking at the same moment.

Kai approached the door that lead into The Elders room. Taking a deep breath and exhaling, He slid open the door, bowed, and entered. The room where the 3 Elders sat was small as well. From the entrance back to where another door was, A pillow, a coffee table with a candle melted to it , and 3 more pillows layed there. Kai kneeled down onto the pillow bowing and raised his head to see the 3 Elders had literally, like magic, appeared from no where. Unstartled, Kai bowed again. "Child we have asked you here, ...for today is a great day. Only once in a great long time do we ever bestow such a gift upon one of our own." Kai head still glued to the floor, "We want you to go out into the surrounding forrest and find something for yourself. It is inside a shack, and once you enter you will be lead down into a small chamber. We will not divulge much more information, other than that, you must choose the correct one." Kai remained still. "Go now child, We await your return." Kai raised up, to them having vanished again, and then bowing once more and exiting the room.

It was nearing dusk when, he had finally gotten out of the city and began his journey into the forrest that lined the outer edges of Rukongai. Kai had absolutly no idea where to begin looking for the shack, but he knew that he coudldn't return until he found it. It took Kai nearly 3 weeks to find this small little place out in the middle or no where. There were a few small battles with hollows, they were extremely weak and Kai cut through them like butter with the training he had had. Entering the small shack, and decending into the room below, it lit up with a blue glow, and revealed with the light were 20 sheathed katanas, all each on a pedastal covered with a cloth. Now Kai knew what they meant by choosing the right one.

They were aranged in an enlongated U. Kai started at the left, and simply held his hand over the hilt of the katana. He did this for every single one, when Kai noticed that the one in the very back, almost pulled his arm down onto it, like in the dream he had many years ago. Kai knew this had to be it. Grabbing it, all went black and Kai was left stading on in a black-like grassy feild. He was so confused and bewildered that Kai was almost panicing. "So you did fine me..." A faint voice said behind him. Snapping around it was the strange beast that was in his dreams many night ago. I am The Noth. You may call upon me whenever you need my help, and my power." And with that, it dissapeared into the ground.

The next thing Kai knew he was outside the shack, laying on the ground. Sitting up and getting back to his feet, Kais new sword was at his side. Running back to town, Kai had noticed his exceptional new speed and strength he had, all the weight training he had greatly improved him. Making his way near the place he had lived for so long, he noticed that something was wrong. The building was missing. All of it. He didn't understand what was going on. One of the peolple in the streets came by and put their hand on his shoulder. "I guess you came to see what happened here? Well a month back, a Hollow got through and rampaged through the city, luckily not to much damage was done, but a lot of places were compeltly destroyed." Kai closed his eyes and shook his head. All that time gone. But not for nothing. Kai had obtained a grand new power, and the proof was right at his left hip.

Kai knew what he needed to do next. Running towards seiretei a gaurd stopped him and asked what he wanted. Kai simply stated he wanted to join the ranks of Shinigami. The guard nodded and lead him into the academy. Following close behind, Kai could hear the faint sounds of blasting and swords clashing, and orders being barked. It reminded him of home, yet louder, and a hell of a lot bigger. The guard took Kai to a small office where a man was busy at a desk with paperwork. Looking up breifly, glancing at Kai, he quickly nodded and went back to fileing papers. The guard slide the door shut and took off walking again. Kai following close behind. He stopped at a door and slid it open and motioned for Kai to go in. With a confused look on his face, Kai went in. Single bed, with a chest at the foot, and a window. Light shined in, covering the bed. "We physically spar, study, then mentally spar, and to end it sleep. That's our day. Get some rest. There are new clothes for you to wear are in the chest. The robes are required outfits of everyone of us." Sliding the door shut with a soft snap, Kai shrugged his shoulders. Setting his new sword down next to him on the bed, he layed back and drifted off to sleep.


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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Kenji Akira on Sun Jan 17, 2010 11:35 am

Umm, don't you have a character already?
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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by DewBunny on Sun Jan 17, 2010 11:40 am

Within all of it's forms, Ryujin is able to control the temperature and density all moisture/water at all times (Able to keep water from changing it's state of mater in any conditions). He is able to utilize the moisture in the air along with ground water for any and all of his techniques.

all water outside of a body please. i know you know better but others could see this and go "but he could do it." also i'd like a stamina drain per amount of liquid manipulated like say manipulation of anything over 500 gallons in a post costs -1 stamina or something along the lines.

This includes all other water sources.

see XD


Anrui - (Silent Tears): Upon releasing, dark clouds automatically and instantly form in the sky. As he opens his umbrella, it will begin to rain throughout the area (100m) and will continue to do so untill it is sealed. The falling raindrops are closely linked to Yaguri's senses enabling him to sense the exact location of anyone within the rain, as well as freely manipulate it for other techniques.

Stamina drain. Hitsugaya could do this atmosphere with Hyourinmaru so i don't see why you couldn't but that scale plus the fact that it's giving you manipulative materials? you at least need some sort of drawback

Kirigakure - (Hidden Mist): Envelops the surrounding area in a dense mist, reducing visibility within the affected area. The density can be controlled by Yaguri, allowing him to create a mist so thick that even he can't see through it. Unlike the original one used in it's sealed form, this mist has an added effect. This mist slowly absorbs the reiatsu of Yaguri's foes while in it's clutches.

this you will need drawbacks for if it's a reiatsu drainer

Ame Nottori - (Rain Capture): This technique causes all rain drops to stick to Yaguri's target(s). The water in the rain drops will attach themselves to the opponent(s), increasingly slowing them down over a period of 2 posts. Once enough water has gathered on an enemy it will also attach to the ground, holding the opponent to the ground and act as the "Water Prison" technique without Yaguri acting as the medium.

You need to list how one could get the rain off (kidou lvl X and up etc)

Miburui Hiebie - (Shivering Cold): Yaguri will form what is known as freezing rain. Freezing rain is the name given to rain that falls when surface temperatures are below freezing and freeze upon impact with any object they encounter. The resulting ice, called glaze, can accumulate to a thickness of several centimeters, slowing movements of those caught in it's path.

Drawbacks and stamina drain. does this focus in one area does it try to freeze you too? clue us in here ok? ^^'

Musei - (Wet Dream): Unaware of it's effects until after it has passed, those in Yaguri's rain are cast into an illusion for their next 3 posts. While it may seem much longer, the illusion happens in less than a second. Unaware that they are in an illusion, anything that happens within it is not real. While any attacks the effected use in the illusion are not actually real, the energy they used is still depleted after the 3 posts.

Avoiding the pun here this is denied. you have no drawbacks or drain for this. although i can't see a problem with those in you might explain how the energy is drained. (attacks still happen they just never reach or what)
Kouryuu - (Rain Dragon): Yaguri is able to manipulate the rain drops into a large water dragon that can be controlled at will. This technique cannot be used until after 10 posts of it raining.

You know it's coming......Stamina Drain >.< Razz

Once Bankai has been activated, it will then begin to pour down on the area with 3x as much water. With the added rain, Yaguri's techniques become deadlier, as he is able to use all of his shikai abilities. Along with this, Yaguri takes control of ALL the moisture/water in the area and can manipulate it at will. None may control the water that he has control of.


Like I said with Shikai stamina drain here (adjust for larger area/volume) and all water outside a body

Haisou no Kouryuu - (Flight of the Rain Dragons): Derived from Yaguri's Bankai ability, he will form 8 dragons of water that can be manipulated at will for attacks. While twisting and turning around one another in attacks, they appear to be dancing in the rain.

Stamina drain and two post attack please. This is too large a scale for you to just pop them from no where and yell "SURPRISE BISHES!!!!!!!!! :p "

Apart from all that I did say first come first serve and if yours gets approved first so be it. Fuji is not as active as i would like and I'm sure Kaji would be thrilled. I am slightly disappointed you don't want espada anymore though T~T

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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Yaguri Issui on Sun Jan 17, 2010 10:40 pm

Hey i am gonna redo this as an espada lol. I will take and edit everything that you said and hopefully have it right this time. Please leave this topic for my references untill i have the new application up.
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Post by DewBunny on Sun Jan 17, 2010 10:42 pm

kk have fun ^^

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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Yaguri Issui on Tue Jan 19, 2010 3:49 am

Ok so I am very fickle as everyone can tell. I am gonna try to go for 3rd Division Captain now instead. I added Stamina usages and also deleted a few techniques like the Clone one. And I have a question. Is the whole Stamina thing something new? I thought everyone was supposed to just regulate their strength and be fair. Cause so far I have only seen like one or two people who have stamina drainings in their techniques. Most don't have anything mentioning something like this. And if the stamina usage is something new or something needed, I suggest it be put in the templates since I had to go through and give them all one when I didnt know they needed it.
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Post by DewBunny on Tue Jan 19, 2010 4:23 am

I hold third division Captain the character is currently being nerfed though

also the stamina thing is recent since people tend to be idiotic and spam ultimate attacks

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Post by Yaguri Issui on Wed Jan 20, 2010 2:25 am

Changed it to 3rd Espada
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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Lee on Sat Jan 23, 2010 2:46 pm

Hey Kyo. This app looks good, except....

When unsheathed, the zanpakuto; creates the sound of a bell chiming and sends out a pulse tha vibrates water molecules. Basing off the fact that balance is controled by a liquid within the inner ear, this pulse causes anyone within the area that Yaguri targets to fall to the ground as if kneeling. Once affected, they can no longer control their balance and also suffer from weakened muscle control for the next five of their posts due to the vibrating water molecules in their muscles. This ability has a cool-down of three posts after the effects have worn off and can only be activated when his sword is pulled from it's sheath. (Effective even against shielded ears by penetrating the skull via bone conduction.)

Also, this ability can also be activated upon striking another medium. Upon contact, vibrations can be sent through the object and can affect anyone touching it. This way of activating it has no cool down but only lasts for 1 post by those affected.

The secondary ability is fine by itself, but the first one's a little bit too much. You see, this means that you can fight over 50% of the battle with a weakened opponent. You should turn down how long it is in effect to about 2 posts, and leave the cooldown at three. Once this is fixed, everything else looks fine.
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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Traca Carmesim on Sat Jan 23, 2010 3:06 pm

3rd Espada is occupied, I don't know why that wasn't mentioned first off but it wasn't for reasons unknown. Unapproval for minor edits doesn't qualify a loss of number, so pick another number that isn't filled and then I'll run over this personally.

My apologies, Rascar is updating to 2nd, not 3rd. Sorry about that, I was ignorant of the numbers.
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Post by Yaguri Issui on Mon Jan 25, 2010 9:16 am

Sorry for wasting everyone's time but I redid the whole thing. I drew a new pic (which took me forever) and it did not seem to go with his first abilities. So i thought it over and finally finished. Most of the abilities have been redone except for the firs few which are automatic ones like Garganta and Cero.

As for the illusion ones, I just wanted them to be illusions so I put that he could cast an illusion on reality. Think of it as no even an illusion and him just using the ability if that helps. I am expecting some feedback but have put stamina costs and weaknesses for them all I believe. Hope to see a reply soon.

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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by DewBunny on Mon Jan 25, 2010 2:51 pm

ack! you jerk you stole my zan Razz just kidding but you did end up with kitsune, illusions and fox fire o o CREEPY! ><

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Post by Yaguri Issui on Mon Jan 25, 2010 5:47 pm

Oh snap... did you have a Zanpakuto that represented a Kitsune?
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Post by DewBunny on Mon Jan 25, 2010 6:16 pm


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Post by Traca Carmesim on Wed Jan 27, 2010 8:19 pm

I think you implied that you drew that picture, which is awesome, just by the way. Use a tablet?

Master of Hand-to-Hand: I'd highly suggest removing this because you'll never use it, other people have it, and it still has Canon references in it that you'd probably want to remove.

Rain: How big is each beam? How strong? How fast?

Fox in Lambs Skin: Changing your form and changing your reiatsu creates a problem because its quetsionably OP. In the past people have either changed their form or their reiatsu (I personally change reiatsu signatures and pressures) but I haven't seen one that can do both, so I'll have to say one or the other here as well.

Little Fox: This effectively creates clones, which I've stated on numerous apps is a no unless you divide your power among them or place severe limits. 1 stamina per clone is not a heavy limit when you have 10 copies of yourself, each at full strength.

Fox Fire: Can they avoid the flames? Also, how many posts until they are consumed by it? Can they mentally will the dispelling of the illusion? If so, how?

God Success: Illusionary damage on this level must remain illusionary. You can auto-kill them in this illusion, so there is no way this is getting approved if you can literally kill them just by thinking it, thats way OP. The illusion HAS to be breakable, and absorbing energy makes no sense because its an illusion, as you've stated, thus they arent really doing it, so remove that as well. And only 1 Stamina for all of this? No way.

Inari: In your description you state abilities but offer no explanation, at least a paragraph a-peice explaining these abilities if you intend to use them with your blade.

Good Fix: 100ft, indestructible, spine? No, it has to be destructible and the range needs to be toned down to 75ft at most.

Segunda: Its not implemented right now and Legion has stated that he didn't want to see any further Segunda on applications, thus this will have to be removed and stored elsewhere for the time being.

RP Sample: 400 words seems rather short, but as long as you don't dip below this (the minimum is 300) I don't see too much wrong with this.
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Post by DewBunny on Wed Jan 27, 2010 8:46 pm

Segunda should be applied for seperately

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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Yaguri Issui on Thu Jan 28, 2010 6:56 am

Traca Carmesim wrote:I think you implied that you drew that picture, which is awesome, just by the way. Use a tablet?
I did indeed draw that pic. However, after scanning it to the computer, I used GIMP to outline the image and then color. All the messy pencil lines were erased in the process to make it look cleaner.

Master of Hand-to-Hand: I removed this as suggested.

Rain: I renamed this Nine Tailed Cero and edited it.

Fox in Lamb's Skin: Deleted this ability.

Little Fox: I edited it. While in a sense it creates a clone, it only lasts a single post, in which it will fade away at the end of my enemy's turn.

Fox Fire: Edited. Yes, the flames can be dispelled. As stated, they are only present where Yaguri has view. Meaning, by simply hiding behind a rock, the flames will disperse. This also would occur by moving to one of Yaguri's blind spots.

God Success: Replaced with Spirit Possession. And yes they are unbreakable, except by fairly easy means. A rock will create ripples in waters surfaces and also break windows lol. Not to mention the fact that these things have to be within the area that I am fighting for it to be utilized.

Inari: Oops, you must be talking about the molecule manipulation. I forgot to delete that from before I redid the app. There delelted.

Good Fix: Edited.

Segunda: My Segunda has been removed.

RP Sample: I replaced my sample with one that I did a while back as a history. Hope that is enough.
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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Kaji-Kanto on Thu Jan 28, 2010 11:15 pm

Hoshi no Tama (star Ball) Please add in the drawback of it takes the same amount of spiritual energy to counter the illusion as it needed to create it.

Kogitsune-Maru (Little fox) - How does the illusion cause harm to the user since it is a illusion?
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Re: Yaguri Issui - (3rd Espada)

Post by Kaji-Kanto on Thu Jan 28, 2010 11:36 pm

Approved since the edits were made.
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